SP TEST

Sinchon Project English Speaking Test for Summer : Advanced Low

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Richness of Expression: The speaker uses a variety of expressions and metaphors, such as "I felt like I'm covered with the blanket of stars," which adds depth and vividness to their speech.

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Correctness of Grammar: While there are minor errors, the speaker shows a good grasp of complex grammatical structures and prepositions, which are often challenging for non-native speakers.

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Smoothness of Speech: The speaker's ability to convey ideas clearly and coherently, despite occasional fillers like "so" and "like," indicates a high level of fluency and comfort with the language.

Overall, the speaker's advanced vocabulary and effective communication skills reflect a strong command of English.

개인적인 생각

장점)

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발음 → 영어를 더 유창하게 들리게 해줌

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두괄식 말하기 → 주저리 주저리 말하지 않고 핵심을 먼저 짚고, 풀어나가는 말하기 방식이 듣는 사람을 더 집중하게 함, e.g) vacation = family, I prefer to have one really close friend

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풍부한 표현 방식, e.g) I felt like I'm covered with the blanket of stars

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전치사 사용 등 디테일한 문법의 정확함

단점)

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문장 중간 중간 "so", “like” 가 많이 들어감

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문법이나 표현 사용에 사소한 실수

FEEDBACK by Simba

표현)

동남아시아 : Southeast Asia 2차 대전 : the world war second < the second world war 가장 기억에 남는 순간 : the memorable moment < the most memorable moment 편의시설 : accommodations < amenities

문법)

수영가다 : I went to swimming < I went swimming

점수를 요구하다 : request the score < ask me the score

일반적으로 : commonly < generally

*They commonly request me to get an IELTS score < They generally ask me to get an IELTS score

교대 근무 : scheduled duty < shift work

much와 many 구분 : much of bugs < many bugs, much friends < a lot of friends

동안에 : during they are teenagers < while they are teenagers

여기, 저기 : in here < here

알지 못한다 : They don't know about < They are unaware of 압박을 가하다 : pressure that my parents have < pressure that my parents put on 과거로 돌아간다면 : if we can go back to the past < if we could go back to the past 선택의 폭을 좁히다 : narrow my choices < narrow down my choices

휴무일 : off days → day off

발음) lo cal I can't

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Q) How was your day today?

My day, I went to swimming in the morning and I'm planning to take an IELTS test in like August or later, so I studied a little for writing test and I came here to talk Can I ask why you are preparing for IELTS? I hope so, but someday I want to immigrate to Australia. I am an air traffic controller now, so I want to work as an air traffic controller in Australia or other countries. So for that, they commonly request me to get an IELTS score over 6 overall.

My day, I went swimming in the morning and I'm planning to take an IELTS test in August or later, so I studied a little for the writing test and I came here to talk. Can I ask why you are preparing for IELTS? I hope so, but someday I want to emigrate to Australia. I am an air traffic controller now, so I want to work as an air traffic controller in Australia or other countries. So for that, they generally request me to get an IELTS score of 6 or higher overall.

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Changed "I went to swimming" to "I went swimming": Removed unnecessary preposition "to" for correct verb usage.

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Changed "in like August or later" to "in August or later": Removed casual filler "like" for clarity.

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Changed "for writing test" to "for the writing test": Added definite article "the" for specificity.

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Changed "immigrate" to "emigrate": Corrected verb choice based on context.

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Changed "commonly" to "generally": More appropriate adverb for formal tone.

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Changed "score over 6" to "score of 6 or higher": Corrected preposition and added clarity.

Q) When do you plan to take your IELTS exam?

Exam on August. I've studied those tests for like three months. You know like every six is nothing difficult in my opinion. I hope I can get it.

Exam is in August. I've studied for those tests for about three months. You know getting a score of 6 is nothing difficult in my opinion. I hope I can get it.

Comment: Added "is in" to specify the timing, "for" for correct preposition usage, "for about" to replace the casual "like," and "getting a score of 6" for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

Q) The advantage and disadvantage of your job

Everywhere is crowded like I can see all the queues around the buildings every day so I prefer to take my off days off during the weekdays instead of weekends. I prefer to have a scheduled duty but because of the scheduled duty I feel a bit difficult to catch up or like maintaining like continuous sleeping patterns that is why so I have to dedicate there's some time that I have to dedicate a whole day just to catch up sleep so that is why then they advantage and disadvantage both good and bad side of the question

Everywhere is crowded and I can see all the queues around the buildings every day, so I prefer to take my days off during the weekdays instead of weekends. I prefer to have a scheduled duty ; however, because of the scheduled duty, I find it a bit difficult to maintain a continuous sleeping pattern. Therefore, I have to dedicate a whole day just to catch up on sleep.

Grammatical Comment:

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Changed "my off days off" to "my days off" for redundancy correction.

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Added "however" for correct clause connection.

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Changed "I feel a bit difficult to catch up or like maintaining like continuous sleeping patterns" to "I find it a bit difficult to maintain a continuous sleeping pattern" for clarity and grammatical correctness.

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Changed "that is why so I have to dedicate there's some time that I have to dedicate a whole day just to catch up sleep" to "Therefore, I have to dedicate a whole day just to catch up on sleep" for clarity and grammatical correctness.

Q) Now it's July now so we like halfway through the year. How was your first half of the year and what do you want to accomplish or what do you want to do?

Actually I transferred to another company this year like last December. So I can say it's a one of the good things that I've done during the half of the year. And I'm planning to take a... There's an English test especially made for workers who's in aviation field.

Actually, I transferred to another company this year, in last December. So I can say it's one of the good things that I've done during the first half of the year. And I'm planning to take an English test specifically designed for workers in the aviation field.

Grammatical Comment:

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Changed "like last December" to "in last December" to correct the preposition.

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Changed "it's a one" to "it's one" to remove the unnecessary article.

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Changed "during the half of the year" to "during the first half of the year" for clarity and correctness.

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Changed "There's an English test especially made for workers who's in aviation field" to "an English test specifically designed for workers in the aviation field" for clarity and grammatical correctness.

It included that immigrant planning that I have to get a highest score on the test to apply for a job abroad so that I'm planning to take those English tests in December. I have to keep studying till December. I want to get that highest grade at the end of the year. So this year is more like an academy for me.

It included emigration planning, and I need to get a high score on the test to apply for a job abroad. Therefore, I'm planning to take those English tests in December. I have to keep studying until December. I want to get that high grade by the end of the year. So this year is more like an academy for me.

Grammatical Comment:

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Changed "immigrant" to "emigration" for correct noun usage based on context.

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Changed "a highest" to "a high" for correct adjective form.

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Changed "till" to "until" for a more formal tone.

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Changed "at the end of the year" to "by the end of the year" for clarity and correctness.

Q) It's July now and the start of summer vacation. Do you have any summer vacation that's really memorable or like a vacation that kind of is like inputted in your mind?

My family. My family prefers extremely hot, humid weather. It is weird, but we all like summer, like getting in the sun, swimming. We all love that. So we prefer to go on vacation to the countries like, located in Southeast part of Asia.

My family. My family prefers extremely hot, humid weather. It is weird, but we all like summer, such as getting in the sun, swimming. We all love that. So we prefer to go on vacation to countries located in the Southeast part of Asia.

Grammatical Comment:

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Changed "like" to "such as" to specify examples.

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Putted "the" after "located in " for correct prepositional phrase usage.

So, except that we went to Guam and Saipan for 12 times. Yeah, it's a lot. But, the last time we visited Saipan, we met a local, you know, like, we met my father's friend who's actually staying there. So he took us to the famous cliff. It is famous for like you can see the historical like stuff like the tank or stuff from the world war ii. But he said we really need to visit there during the night.

So, besides that, we went to Guam and Saipan 12 times. Yeah, it's a lot. However, the last time we visited Saipan, we met a local, specifically my father's friend who is actually living there. He took us to the famous cliff, which is famous for its historical artifacts like tanks from World War II. He said we really need to visit there during the night.

Grammatical Comment:

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Changed "So, except that" to "So, besides that, we" for clarity and to correct the introductory phrase.

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Changed "for 12 times" to "12 times" to correct the prepositional phrase.

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Changed "But, the last time" to "However, the last time" for better sentence flow.

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Changed "like, we met my father's friend who's actually staying there" to "specifically my father's friend who is actually living there" for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

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Changed "So he took us" to "He took us" to remove redundancy.

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Changed "like the tank or stuff" to "its historical artifacts like tanks from World War II" for clarity and specificity.

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Changed "But" to "He" to avoid starting the sentence with a conjunction.

So we were like, we asked him why and he told us like, it's the greatest place to see the stars. So we went there. So it was so dark, we couldn't even recognize each other's cars without the headlights. So we made like a... It's just a joke to turn off the headlights and all of a sudden we can see anything in front of us.

So we were like, we asked him why and he told us it was the greatest place to see the stars. So we went there. It was so dark, we couldn't even recognize each other's cars without the headlights. So we made a joke to turn off the headlights and all of a sudden we couldn't see anything in front of us.

Grammatical Comment:

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Changed "it's" to "it was": Corrected tense to past.

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Removed "like" after "So we were": Removed unnecessary filler word.

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Changed "So it was so dark" to "It was so dark": Removed repetitive "so".

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Changed "made like a..." to "made a joke": Removed unnecessary filler "like".

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Changed "we can see" to "we couldn't see": Corrected to negative form for clarity and grammatical correctness.

And we arrived there and right after I took off the car, I felt like I'm covered with the blanket of stars and it was the first moment that the great nature made me cry. I was pretty overwhelmed about the greatness of the nature. That was the memorable moment of my vacation. You should go there you should visit the famous cliff. I forgot the name of the cliff so silent place. In Korean we call it as a suicidal cliff. I don't think it's there that's real name. But anyway I really recommend you to visit there during the night time.  I hope you can go there, it's really really pretty.

And we arrived there and right after I got out of the car, I felt like I was covered with the blanket of stars and it was the first moment that the great nature made me cry. I was pretty overwhelmed by the greatness of nature. That was the memorable moment of my vacation. You should go there, you should visit the famous cliff. I forgot the name of the cliff ; it's a silent place. In Korean, we call it the suicidal cliff. I don't think that’s real name. But anyway, I really recommend you to visit there during the nighttime. I hope you can go there, it's really, really pretty.

Grammatical Comment:

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Changed "took off the car" to "got out of the car": Corrected to appropriate verb phrase.

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Changed "I'm covered" to "I was covered": Corrected tense for consistency.

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Changed "the great nature" to "the great nature": Added article "the" for grammatical correctness.

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Changed "about the greatness of the nature" to "by the greatness of nature": Corrected preposition and removed unnecessary article.

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Changed "so silent place" to "it's a silent place": Corrected phrase for clarity.

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Changed "call it as a suicidal cliff" to "call it the suicidal cliff": Corrected article usage.

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Changed "during the night time" to "during the nighttime": Corrected compound word.

Q) How was the food?

It's good, it's actually like a very casual. So you can eat anything like hamburgers and I'm a person who doesn't like to go to the famous tourist places. I'm the person who prefers to stay in the hotel and enjoy the sun and go to swimming pool. So most of the food that I had is from the hotel that I It was good.

It's good, it's actually very casual. So you can eat anything like hamburgers. I'm a person who doesn't like to go to the famous tourist places. I prefer to stay in the hotel and enjoy the sun and go to the swimming pool. So most of the food that I had was from the hotel. It was good.

Grammatical Comment: Corrected for clarity, removed redundancy, and fixed verb tense and article usage.

Q) What was the best food there?

Actually, the food that like mangosteen. It looks like a garlic. I was going to say a paw of... It looks like that. It's really sweet. Actually, it's very expensive to have it here in Korea, but in Saipan, it's really cheap. So I had a lot of mangosteens.

Actually, I really liked the food, especially mangosteen. It looks like garlic. I was going to say a paw of... It looks like that. It's really sweet. Actually, it's very expensive to have it here in Korea, but in Saipan, it's really cheap. So I had a lot of mangosteens.

Grammatical Comment: Changed "the food that like mangosteen" to "I really liked the food, especially mangosteen" for clarity and subject-verb agreement. Changed "a garlic" to "garlic" to correct the article usage.

Q) Do you think it's better to live in a city or countryside? If you have to choose, would you choose to live in the city or the rural area?

I prefer to live in the city actually. I am really scared of insects actually. So I prefer to live in cities because there's not that much of bugs around here and I like to live near the accommodations like all the department stores like most all kinds of stores and like swimming pools, everything. It's easy to do things like everything in the city. And I was born and raised in Seoul, the biggest city in South Korea. Maybe that's why I prefer to live in cities rather than the rural area.

I prefer to live in the city because I am really scared of insects. So I prefer to live in cities because there aren't many bugs around here and I like to live near amenities like all the department stores, various kinds of stores, and swimming pools. It's easy to do everything in the city. And I was born and raised in Seoul, the biggest city in South Korea. Maybe that's why I prefer to live in cities rather than rural areas.

Grammatical Comment: Removed redundancy, corrected subject-verb agreement, replaced informal words with more appropriate terms, and fixed plural noun usage for clarity and correctness.

Q) Have you worn school uniforms when you were a student? Nowadays, lots of students have grudges about wearing school uniforms. Do you think students should wear school uniforms when they are a student? Or is it okay if they just wear normal casual Do you think uniform is necessary

I can't, I cannot say it is necessary for students but I think wearing a uniform during the school like they're teenagers is better than wearing their whatever clothes they want to wear because as I am an employee now Every morning I have to decide what I want to wear for the day. I don't know why but it is treated as some kind of manner to wear different clothes everyday. So it is pretty tiring for me. And it takes a lot of money to prepare, to have those all the clothes.

I can't, I cannot say it is necessary for students, but I think wearing a uniform during school, when they're teenagers, is better than wearing whatever clothes they want because as I am an employee now, every morning I have to decide what I want to wear for the day. I don't know why but it is treated as some kind of manner to wear different clothes everyday. So it is pretty tiring for me. And it takes a lot of money to prepare, to have all those clothes.

Grammatical Comment: Corrected punctuation for clarity, adjusted phrasing for better readability, and fixed minor grammatical errors.

So during the school time, I think students should wear uniforms better than other clothes for their parents actually. To not support them, to reduce their economical pressure a bit maybe. It's already took a lot of money to raise a single child here. So I think they should wear uniforms. People do that a bit, probably. They have to bear it. You have no choice.

So during school, I think students should wear uniforms rather than other clothes to help their parents reduce their financial pressure a bit. It already takes a lot of money to raise a single child here. So I think they should wear uniforms. People do that a lot, actually. They have to bear it. You have no choice.

Grammatical Comment: Corrected word choice, clarity, and tense consistency for better readability and grammatical accuracy.

Q)Is it better to have one close friend or many friends? What do you think? Would you rather have one really close friend or a lot?

I prefer to have one really close friend. I am a very introverted person. So I prefer not to go out. I don't prefer to go outside that much. So I don't have that much friends actually. But all of my friends know that I am this kind of person. So they don't call me like all of a sudden to ask me out or they understand if I don't read their messages immediately or if I don't answer their calls. I think that means they also know me, know who I am, truly. And I also know them pretty well, so I respect them and I respect their personality. If they ask me to go out sincerely, then surely I go out with them. I think because of those reasons, I prefer to have one of the close friends.

I prefer to have one really close friend. I am a very introverted person, so I prefer not to go out. I don't prefer to go outside that much. Therefore, I don't have that many friends actually. But all of my friends know that I am this kind of person. Therefore, they don't call me suddenly to ask me to go out or they understand if I don't read their messages immediately or if I don't answer their calls. I think that means they also know me, know who I am, truly. And I also know them pretty well, so I respect them and I respect their personality. If they ask me to go out sincerely, then surely I will go out with them. I think because of those reasons, I prefer to have one really close friend.

Grammatical Comment: Corrected punctuation, conjunction usage, word choice, and tense for better readability, coherence, and grammatical accuracy.

Q) Do you think homework is necessary for learning? What do you think about homework?

I think it is necessary especially for teenagers who have to learn. It's their job. Being a student is their job, so they have to learn. Based on my experience, I don't want to say something bad, but in this academy, we don't have that much homework in here. To make some time to study more to improve my English speaking skills. But I am a fully grown-up responsible person. So now I understand that I have to do something to improve myself. But during the teenage time, I think they don't know about the consequences of their actions maybe. So I think it sounds a bit mean. I think giving them a homework can help them to achieve more in academy.

I think it is necessary, especially for teenagers who have to learn. It's their job. Being a student is their job, so they have to learn. Based on my experience, I don't want to say something bad, but in this academy, we don't have that much homework here. This makes some time to study more and improve my English speaking skills. But I am a fully grown-up responsible person. So now I understand that I have to do something to improve myself. But during the teenage years, I think they don't know about the consequences of their actions maybe. So while it sounds a bit mean, I think giving them homework can help them to achieve more in the academy.

Grammatical Comment: Corrected redundancy, verb tense, and article usage for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

Q) Did you have a lot of homework when you were young?

Yeah, actually a lot. I am an only child so I have to deal with all the pressure that I... expectations. Expectations and pressure that my parents have. So my first tutoring was when I was in when I was six months old. Then I have to learn how to speak in Korean when I was six months old and I had to go to the like learn about music and also like arts and like all the physical subjects. I need to go to academy to learn how to jump rope. It's pretty weird but I had lots and lots of homework. I asked my mom about like if we can go back to the past, will you do that same thing again? And she said yes. I was like even though I got so stressed.

Yeah, actually a lot. I am an only child so I have to deal with all the pressure and... expectations. Expectations and pressure that my parents have. So my first tutoring was when I was six years old. Then I had to learn how to speak in Korean when I was six months old and I had to go to learn about music, arts, and all the physical subjects. I needed to go to an academy to learn how to jump rope. It's pretty weird but I had lots and lots of homework. I asked my mom if we could go back to the past, would you do the same thing again? And she said yes. I was like even though I got so stressed.

Grammatical Comment:

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Changed "six months old" to "six years old" for logical consistency.

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Changed "I have to" to "I had to" for past tense consistency.

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Simplified and clarified the list of subjects to avoid repetition and improve readability.

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Changed "need to" to "needed to" for past tense consistency.

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Added "an" before "academy" for correct article usage.

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Changed "I asked my mom about like if we can go back to the past, will you do that same thing again?" to "I asked my mom if we could go back to the past, would you do the same thing again?" for clarity and grammatical correctness.

My mom wanted me to study, to study just normal academic style way to go to normal university. She didn't want me to narrow my choices. Because if you go into music, there's only one path. I understand. But just imagining myself as a professional instrument player, I think that Kind of like life might be happy for me but now I am happy.

My mom wanted me to study, to study just in a normal academic style way to go to a normal university. She didn't want me to narrow my choices. Because if you go into music, there's only one path. I understand. But just imagining myself as a professional instrument player, I think that kind of life might be happy for me but now I am happy.

Grammatical Comment: Changed "to study just normal academic style way" to "to study just in a normal academic style way" for correct prepositional phrase usage. Changed "normal university" to "a normal university" to add the necessary article. Changed "kind of like life" to "kind of life" to remove redundancy and improve readability.

영어 실력 향상을 위한 몇 가지 조언

Detailed Recommendation for Improvement:

Grammar and Sentence Structure:

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Practice Verb Tenses: The speaker often mixes up verb tenses, especially when narrating past experiences. Focus on practicing past, present, and future tenses to ensure consistency.

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Use of Articles: The speaker sometimes omits articles ("a," "an," "the"). Practice using articles correctly, as they are essential in English for clarity.

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Prepositions: Improve understanding and usage of prepositions (e.g., "in," "on," "at"). These small words can change the meaning of a sentence significantly.

Vocabulary Expansion:

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Learn Synonyms: Expand vocabulary by learning synonyms for commonly used words. This will help avoid repetition and make speech more engaging.

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Idiomatic Expressions: Incorporate idiomatic expressions and phrases into conversations. This will make the speaker sound more natural and fluent.

Fluency and Pronunciation:

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Reduce Fillers: The speaker uses fillers like "like" and "you know" frequently. Practice speaking without using these fillers to sound more confident and fluent.

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Pronunciation Practice: Focus on difficult words and sounds. Use online resources like YouGlish to hear native pronunciations and practice mimicking them.